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Post subject: Your Thoughts As A Listener
Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 4:40 pm
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I just started working on this song a few hours ago. The lyric is one that I wrote a long time ago, but had the idea for a better feel for it.

I added a chorus (well most of one), and there is already 3 verses, so I'm gonna make it... 2 verses... chorus... last verse... chorus.

I made a short recording of just the first verse and the chorus. I'm a little stuck on the last line of the chorus, so I just filled it in with whatever came to my mind at the time.

Let me know what your initial thoughts are as a listener. You can throw in some pointers musically as well, but mainly I just wanna get feedback from a listener's view.

Insecurity

Thanks in advance.


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Post subject: Re: Your Thoughts As A Listener
Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 5:57 pm
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Really nice. If it was me, I'd up the tempo a bit, something like "Smooth Operator" by Sade.

I like the lyrics. Structurally, I'd go intro - verse - chorus - verse - chorus - instrumental solo - chorus - verse, chorus outro.

Just my 2 cents... but remember, you asked.

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Post subject: Re: Your Thoughts As A Listener
Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 7:21 pm
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I like it. :D


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Post subject: Re: Your Thoughts As A Listener
Posted: Tue Aug 09, 2011 9:25 am
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Very nice! I agree with digby on the tempo.


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Post subject: Re: Your Thoughts As A Listener
Posted: Tue Aug 09, 2011 9:51 am
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Nice song!! I like the mood it sets, but agree with digby that the tempo needs a little tweaking. Maybe just a tad quicker. Sounds just a little "draggy" here and there.

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Post subject: Re: Your Thoughts As A Listener
Posted: Tue Aug 09, 2011 12:14 pm
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Left ya 5 stars on your new one!
Comments are disabled, but sounds good!

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Post subject: Re: Your Thoughts As A Listener
Posted: Wed Aug 10, 2011 7:19 pm
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Thanks alot everyone. I'll play around with it some more and see what happens.


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