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Post subject: My Angle
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 5:03 pm
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When I was a young man not much more than a boy - I'd work all day and play all night, my god it was a joy - just feeling good and haveing fun, nothing else really mattered - I didn't need anyone to help me through me through this life - to help me through the rough spots, the pitfalls, and strife - to bad I didn't recognize, the best thing I ever had -was you my dear, and onley you, you were my loveing wife - finally you'd had enough, and you turned me out - it was a fogy night in pendleton, couldent even see the lights - I was 41 and feeling bad, and didn't have a dime - I was fresh out of whiskey, and hadn't eaten for some time - they say they found me in a ditch, my cloths were wrinkled and torn - I was barley hanging on to life, forgotten and forlorned - it was that fogy night in pendleton, when I finally saw the light - it was that fogy night in pendleton, when you came back into my sight - you picked me up and brushed me off, and sat me in your car - you tuck me home and fed me, then you smialed at me and said that you still loved me, I be damned if I know why - because I dont deserve anyone as good as you, you must be an angle sent down from above, sent down to earth to save me, and fill my hart with love - and if you never leave me, I'll be as good as gold - and I will always love you and when were getting old - I'll thank the good Lord Jesus, that you came back to me that day.


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Post subject: Re: My Angle
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 5:10 pm
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Hey man,if these are songs or poems or whatever it is you're doing,it would be more enjoyable to read if you would write them in lines with punctuation or verses and chorus instead of one long paragraph.....just a suggestion. :)


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Post subject: Re: My Angle
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 5:26 pm
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Read it the way you want, the interpretation is all yours


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Post subject: Re: My Angle
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 5:41 pm
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I kind of went crosseyed trying to figure where one sentence ended and another one started. Punctuation is a good thing.


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Post subject: Re: My Angle
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 6:08 pm
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I guess you are having a stream of consciousness moment. If you want people to actually read it, though, you need at least some properly placed punctuation. And to place one lone period at the end ... as if what preceded it was anything in the vicinity of being a sentence is at best comical ...

Sorry ... just keeping it real.

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Post subject: Re: Your reaction to no punctuation in : My Angle
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 6:30 pm
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your points are well taken. The lone oeriod at the end is kind of comical. :oops:


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Post subject: Re: My Angle
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 6:37 pm
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Ya spelled Angel ya snit. :roll:


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