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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Wed Jun 12, 2013 10:50 am
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Me too you spacewolf!

Ok Mike, haiku it is:

she is so pretty
I am so shy
she says lets hold hands
I held hers in mine
she seemed to like it
I didn't know why
but then, I liked it too

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Wed Jun 12, 2013 10:56 am
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Solid Body Love Songs wrote:
Me too you spacewolf!

Ok Mike, haiku it is:

she is so pretty
I am so shy
she says lets hold hands
I held hers in mine
she seemed to like it
I didn't know why
but then, I liked it too


Right on Solid! I must do some homework, I
wonder about syllabic counts, and just how
strict I must be with it.
But anything Zen-like is my cup of tea! 8)

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Wed Jun 12, 2013 11:27 am
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Mike, a haiku explanation would be too extensive so here is a wiki link:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku
As you can tell, I am free form. not constrained by the 17 'on' in just 3 phrases of 5-7-5 'on'. I'm so non-traditional but with great respect for the form that has taught me so much about love of communication.

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Wed Jun 12, 2013 5:01 pm
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Reading the forum
I am pondering haiku
I can't let it go

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Wed Jun 26, 2013 7:25 pm
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a walk through the park
at night, in the dark
a few stars to light the way

careful steps stay on the path
a short distance to traverse
there and back I should say

steps in reverse
seeing the light
outside of home

turned it on before I left
so that the walk home
would be a brighter one

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 5:58 pm
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Solid Body Love Songs wrote:
a walk through the park
at night, in the dark
a few stars to light the way

careful steps stay on the path
a short distance to traverse
there and back I should say

steps in reverse
seeing the light
outside of home

turned it on before I left
so that the walk home
would be a brighter one

Excellent, Rollie. Eloquent, to the point, and the imagery really spoke to me. Easily one of your best, IMHO.

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Fri Jun 28, 2013 8:35 pm
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spacewolf wrote:
Excellent, Rollie. Eloquent, to the point, and the imagery really spoke to me. Easily one of your best, IMHO.


Thankyou spacewolf, unexpected and very appreciated! :D

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Tue Jul 16, 2013 4:13 pm
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me and my honey
in our cozy chair
drinking beer at midnight
in our underwear
two sleepy people
by dawns early light
too much in love
to say goodnight

(I love this one verse from an old song "by dawn's early light", changed most of the words in the first half lol)

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Sat Aug 31, 2013 3:16 pm
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This verse much like the first verse of this thread, started on Capo's "songwriting time" thread":

I like this cadence, to my mind it fits with instrumentation, accents and enunciation and you could have a love song:

Honey, how are you tonight
you're the one I'm here to see
you are so beautiful tonight
you are all there is for me

Baby, will you hold me tight
our true love in ecstasy
with you it feels so right
for our love eternally

I can't see you every night
though my heart is here with you
very soon I'll have to go
I want to spend this night with you

Honey, now I'll be with you
endless love perpetually
us together, just we two
in our lovers fantasy

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Thu Oct 17, 2013 12:44 am
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Solid Body Love Songs wrote:
Fenderseeker09, magician, a wonderful spell from your keyboard.

He said "this copyright protection is important"
"people can use your work without you knowing"
I said "Talent is a gift that keeps on giving, it evolves"

He then said " I wrote this great song last week"
"I think it could sell some, I'm not going to post it and have another person use it"
I said "that was last weeks song, talent unfolds, that forward push allows you to feel what lies ahead"

He said "last weeks song, what about this week?"
"and next week, these songs may be worth something"
I tried not to smile, he is such a good Bro, and said "don't worry you won't run out of material"

a re-post for Jake, worry not about your art, it is yours now and was from the start.

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Mon Oct 21, 2013 7:16 pm
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poems and people share a trait that's not trite
similar subjects written just right
monozygotic/dizygotic under an examining light
each one has a difference
sometimes the same but with an otherness
one from another elementally separating likeness
not a preference not by chance
like rhythmic steps of lifes dance
agreeing each instance variance distance
no two poems or people are just like
subtly with eyes closed day and night
feel the changes in the same things
uniquely different contrastingly alike

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Thu Oct 24, 2013 1:06 am
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tonight as I sat listening to metal music and punk
suddenly right next to my chair I heard a thunk
it was this big furry beautiful hunk
that came and stretched herself out with a thump
her sweet puppy name is daisy
and charpe she by no means is lazy
she just wanted a warm spot for her rump
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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Mon Oct 28, 2013 7:33 pm
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Brad, when I posted a link to this thread for a brother on facebook the thumbnail is the universe, thankyou Fender nice touch. :D 8)

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Tue Nov 12, 2013 6:11 pm
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another try, any member can add, more verses:
spacewolf wrote:
Buxom wrote:
Solid Body Love Songs wrote:
try this again
Christmas, add 1 line or 15, variations of lines, stay close to "The Night Before Christmas" poem but different or not so different if it fits, you know. here's my version of a start:

t'was some nights before Christmas
round the Forum, Fenders Lounge
not a byte of info was traveling
not a light blinking
not even a mouse clicking
anywhere in this guitar house

gig bags hanging
by the loading doors there
spirits of Leo and George
watch us with love and care
The IT team were nestled all snug in their beds
While visions of terabyte servers danced in their heads

with the Stratocaster in its hard-case
and the Telecaster on its stand
Fender offices lights switched to dimmer
computers moved to hibernate for
an overdue rest on this winters night


When what to my wondering eyes should appear?
The ghost of Jimi Hendrix with a Stratocaster near
He plugged it into an amp and blasted away
Playing Purple Haze for me on Christmas Day

I grabbed a guitar but couldn't begin to keep up
So I tried to blame it on a broken pup
But Jimi just laughed in his nonchalant way
And set fire to his guitar before fading away

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Tue Nov 12, 2013 6:24 pm
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When are you going to publish SBLS

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