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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:18 pm
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say a few words
what could it be
a minute or two
two and a half or three
those moments pass
only this time left some words
in memory of moments passed
could they be happy ones
or informational perhaps
ones about the weather that we're having
or ones about experiences we're having
or that we haven't yet had
a description of something
this is a Fender Forum after all
describe a Fender guitar
I'll start
beautiful

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Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2011 12:25 am
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Really nice poetry, keep them coming!!..

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2011 12:40 pm
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Welcome to the Forum alexsmth114!!

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Thu Mar 03, 2011 1:24 pm
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i've gotta great poem written in my book, i'll show some of it to you's after school 8)

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Thu Mar 03, 2011 2:35 pm
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pickups covered in grime
rusty strings...a bridge too far
he walked away slowly
to strum the thin chords of what
remained of his life

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 3:13 am
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wisdom isn't present
cutting flowers as immortal artificial souls are existing
fool me around seize the moon
a friend socializes to himself
in a corner, lonesome
questioning the talent
be aware she veer's to a point

try an have a guess what its bout

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 5:22 am
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radio_friendly_unit_shifter wrote:
wisdom isn't present
cutting flowers as immortal artificial souls are existing
fool me around seize the moon
a friend socializes to himself
in a corner, lonesome
questioning the talent
be aware she veer's to a point

try an have a guess what its bout


I thought it might reference some recent interactions with your band mates, cool verse, epilogue or prologue usable or whatever you choose Bro, it's cool.

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 3:56 pm
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Solid Body Love Songs wrote:
radio_friendly_unit_shifter wrote:
wisdom isn't present
cutting flowers as immortal artificial souls are existing
fool me around seize the moon
a friend socializes to himself
in a corner, lonesome
questioning the talent
be aware she veer's to a point

try an have a guess what its bout


I thought it might reference some recent interactions with your band mates, cool verse, epilogue or prologue usable or whatever you choose Bro, it's cool.

now that you read it, i guess you could say its about that :) but thats not what i had one mind though

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 11:36 pm
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"that wasn't what I had in mind" he said
"or that's not what I had in mind"
"I guess you could say its about that"
"or you could, say, guess, that it is"
"now that you read it"

I read it again and have to ask what is it about?

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 1:24 am
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Haysuse, are ya tryin to give us older guys a heart attack! cuase shes sleepin and this would be her poem!
roses are red,
violets are blue,
bug me again and the only brushin your going to get is the brushin of the back of my hand!
hay man check it out! went across the page twice, and then some.
yuk, yuk.
great little poem solid, I,am going to try and get her to read it in the morning
yuk,yuk!
just kidin with ya.


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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Tue Mar 08, 2011 12:59 pm
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glad that you liked it alexander-57. in this thread all manner of wordsmithing is welcome. here, I'll give your poem a go:
roses are red
violets are blue
I didn't know love
until I met you
the sound of your voice
soothes my soul through and through
the warmth of your touch
heals my battle scarred body too
your physical beauty is matched by
the caring personality possessed by you
so believe me when I say it's you that I love
Because that is from my heart and so true

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Tue Mar 08, 2011 5:55 pm
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Solid Body Love Songs wrote:
glad that you liked it alexander-57. in this thread all manner of wordsmithing is welcome. here, I'll give your poem a go:
roses are red
violets are blue
I didn't know love
until I met you
the sound of your voice
sooth's my soul through and through
the warmth of your touch
heals my battle scarred body too
your physical beauty is matched by
the caring personality possessed by you
so believe me when I say it's you that I love
Because that is from my heart and so true

Yes solid I hear ya!


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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Tue Mar 08, 2011 11:51 pm
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my response from another thread, thanks for the talk DD



the worried young man
and the mirror you'll see
is a tale as sad as a tale can be
he was smitten by a woman
very lovely was she
and so he painted her picture
on his mirror happily
the likeness was perfect
a more beautiful woman never seen
but there was just one thing
the young man was worried
about everything
most especially the woman
in the picture he painted
the woman in his dream
would he be good enough
could she love this man or
was he not the one that she could love
was his plea as the days went by
he would gaze at the mirror
worrying but never asking her point of view
days turned to years and still he looked
at the painted mirror image
the woman he once knew
passing time caused the paint to flake
the true mirror showing through in its wake
when the young man looked now
at the mirror with his beautiful picture
no longer there, now just an old man
not smiling, with a little gray hair
old eyes lost their sparkle
while waiting and wondering there
about his beautiful woman
that vanished write before his eyes

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Fri Mar 11, 2011 3:17 am
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response from another thread, thanks for the talk DD.

there he stands to watch the dance
imagining while he stares from his wallflower stance
the dancers dance the time away
his time is passed staring at the foot loose fray
as the years slip away the dancers age gracefully
just like their dance across the wooden floor their stage
but the wallflower grows old differently
without movement his years pass silently
he critiques and comments to himself
about the dancers moves and how they look
though like all wallflowers his words are moot
for without dancing how can you really know
what dancers look like unless you are on the dance floor
dancers dancing away their precious time
instead of staring but not moving
his mind imagining without grooving
might just as well be a mime

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Fri Mar 11, 2011 4:26 pm
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Solid Body Love Songs wrote:
response from another thread, thanks for the talk DD.

there he stands to watch the dance
imagining while he stares from his wallflower stance
the dancers dance the time away
his time is passed staring at the foot loose fray
as the years slip away the dancers age gracefully
just like their dance across the wooden floor their stage
but the wallflower grows old differently
without movement his years pass silently
he critiques and comments to himself
about the dancers moves and how they look
though like all wallflowers his words are moot
for without dancing how can you really know
what dancers look like unless you are on the dance floor
dancers dancing away their precious time
instead of staring but not moving
his mind imagining without grooving
might just as well be a mime

boy can you poem!


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