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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Wed Jan 26, 2011 3:58 pm
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you feel your eyes
its not gonna stay
cant make a room
we'll build sugar
on its going to see the day
sea floor is light up like night

its not a room
your going to stay
sugar and the night
we'll build a sea floor

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Thu Jan 27, 2011 1:22 am
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I picked up a completed works of e.e.cummings from the library today. Absolutely brilliant.

Now I've never read real poetry, but I can tell this man had fantastic talent. It's to the point where I almost don't want to look into others' work because cummings has made my only experience with poetry flawless.


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Posted: Thu Jan 27, 2011 4:14 am
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Toronado wrote:
I picked up a completed works of e.e.cummings from the library today. Absolutely brilliant.

Now I've never read real poetry, but I can tell this man had fantastic talent. It's to the point where I almost don't want to look into others' work because cummings has made my only experience with poetry flawless.

e.e cummings you say? will have to check his poet skills out 8)

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Thu Jan 27, 2011 4:29 am
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Toronado wrote:
I picked up a completed works of e.e.cummings from the library today. Absolutely brilliant.

Now I've never read real poetry, but I can tell this man had fantastic talent. It's to the point where I almost don't want to look into others' work because cummings has made my only experience with poetry flawless.

ee cummings? could write poetry.
A painter, playwright, author, essayist remembered as
the preeminent poet for the 20th century.
American, I should say, for that is him so transcendentally.
Believing in love, and in life, and in nature,
also modern, romantic, avante, blue, acrostic,
sonnetly, surreal, free, traditional, sometimes satirically.
That his consanguinesque parisian visiting,
unconcerned, rhyming, metering, syntax is was
intricately recognizable beautifully.
Done about sometimes death, though a life spiritually.
Missed, yes, unconventionally.
"He still sells well", notably.
My acquaintance from society,
would you write a poem for he?
A combination of conventional rules, not.
A springboard to artistic development,
in the world,
in the social fabric,
in you and
me
or
we, thee, thou, us, them, total, popular, presentically unorthodoxically.

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Thu Jan 27, 2011 4:57 am
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watch helplessly as the eyes go by
bloodshot, spearing a fish
deaf, but can hear movement
as a table number welds him to the ground
feet breaking into positive unit
the world, breaks free, as does he
abnomally holding its straw
her mind itself becomes desolved glue
gasping for current as the wind pushes him lower
as do i crookedly think
he heard a movement
low as the sky and magma
before it found a saviour key
strength is radically changed

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Fri Jan 28, 2011 4:01 pm
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chemistry class dialogue
Mr. Mann - teacher
Danny - student
Sharon - Danny's girlfriend
me - narrator
Harvey - class dunce
another boring chemistry class, tons of homework, Mr. Mann is lecturing about the periodic table, again when he catches Danny whispering to Sharon.
Mr. Mann said, " one thousand word essay by Monday Daniel. For talking, while I'm talking."
Danny looks surprised, wants to tell Mr. Mann they were talking about today's homework and said, "but Mr. Mann".
"one thousand more Daniel that makes two thousand words for Monday", said Mr. Mann
Danny, frustrated, forgets and tries again, "let me explain".
"three thousand Daniel".
"But I".
"four thousand".
"But she".
"five thousand".
"But you".
"six thousand".
"But me". (now the class catches on , rumbles)
"Seven thousand". (The class rumbles, Mr. Mann is turning red.)
"But they". (loud)
"eight thousand". (rumbles)
"But them". (rumbling loud).
"nine thousand".
"But her".
"ten thousand".
"But him".
"eleven thousand".
"But we". ( loud).
"twelve thousand". (louder).
"But she".
"thirteen thousand".
"But you".
"fourteen thousand".
"But me".
"fifteen thousand".
Sharon takes Danny by the shoulders and says, "Danny!", she is pleading.
"Danny, snap out of it", louder now, tears in her eyes, I can't believe Sharon is crying, "Danny, Mr. Mann isn't going to stop, you, have to, stop".
Danny, staring at Mr. Mann like a prizefighter who just lost his fight on points. He knows Sharon will help with the essay, probably why she's crying.
Harvey yells out, "How many is that Mr. Mann?"
"Fifteen thousand for Daniel and one thousand for you Harvey by Monday", said Mr. Mann.
The bell rings.
You know? From this angle Harvey's head is sort of pointy, must be the dunce cap he wore through the seventh grade.

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Mon Jan 31, 2011 8:12 pm
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"but".
"let me explain".
"But I".
"But she".
"But you".
"But me".
"But they".
"But them".
"But her".
"But him".
"But we".
"But she".
"But you".
"But me".

wiki: but - conj. prep. adv. Idiom:but for

Usage Problem Except.

Usage Note: Traditional grammarians have worried over what form the pronoun ought to take when but is used to indicate an exception in sentences such as No one but I (or No one but me) has read it. Some have argued that but is a conjunction in these sentences and therefore should be followed by the nominative form I. However, many of these grammarians have gone on to argue somewhat inconsistently that the accusative form me is appropriate when the but phrase occurs at the end of a sentence, as in No one has read it but me. While this treatment of the construction has a considerable weight of precedent on its side and cannot be regarded as incorrect, a strong case can be made on grammatical grounds for treating this use of but as a preposition. For one thing, if but were truly a conjunction here, we would expect the verb to agree in person and number with the noun or pronoun following but; we would then say No one but the students have read it. What is more, if but were a true conjunction here we would not expect that it could be moved to the end of a clause, as in No one has read it but the students. Note that we cannot use the conjunction and in a similar way, saying John left and everyone else in the class in place of John and everyone else in the class left. These observations suggest that but is best considered as a preposition here and followed by accusative forms such as me and them in all positions: No one but me has read it. No one has read it but me. These recommendations are supported by 73 percent of the Usage Panel when the but phrase precedes the verb and by 93 percent when the but phrase follows the verb. · But is redundant when used together with however, as in But the army, however, went on with its plans; one or the other word should be eliminated. · But is generally not followed by a comma. Correct written style requires Kim wanted to go, but we stayed, not Kim wanted to go, but, we stayed. · But may be used to begin a sentence at all levels of style.

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2011 7:59 am
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monkey throwing poo
ruined my day at the zoo
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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2011 1:50 pm
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Screamin' Armadillo wrote:
Haiku:

monkey throwing poo
ruined my day at the zoo
gone to dry cleaners


un unh the cleaners won't do
clothes were not meant to catch monkey poo
they must be incinerated
they're much too contaminated
cross pollen-nation with other clothes
is not recommended

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Thu Feb 03, 2011 11:57 pm
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she said, "now is the time"
"c'mon think of a rhyme"
"if you won't do one on demand"
"you know, a rhyme that can stand"
"on its own, a memorable brand"
"if not now when is the time"?
once again she is calling me out
on my rhymes casting a doubt
first emotion felt in my mind
"why does she tweak me all of the time"?
then thought, "might be she's write this time"
"if I can't think of a memorable riff"
"its just a waste of a usable giff"
tweaked I felt 'cause I wasn't rehearsing a song
I was staring at the TV for too long
so
in days of old when Vikings were bold
before paper cups had been invented
Vikings drank their beer
from the skin of a deer
after it had sufficiently fermented

ok, its not "mine" really
but she doesn't know that :lol:

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Post subject: Re: YOUR POETRY
Posted: Fri Feb 04, 2011 1:37 am
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im going through a dry spell on poems at te moment.

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Posted: Sat Feb 05, 2011 12:14 am
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radio_friendly_unit_shifter wrote:
im going through a dry spell on poems at te moment.

+1
I've been absorbed by reruns of CSI an old TV favorite :oops:

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Posted: Wed Feb 09, 2011 7:43 pm
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The day was crisp and cold
The man was brittle and old
He took his ol' cane
Trodding through the rain
To retrieve his dropped billfold.
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Looking westwardly
The sun setting in the sea
Beautiful canvas.

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Here I sit broken hearted
Tried to...ah forget it!

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