i know my vocals are bad, but i wrote lyrics for the song last night so...

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=9685126

its not 100% perfect i know, i've gotta calm down on hitting the strings a bit haha, and i might have got the beat's wrong in some parts caus it is hard to strum very fast plus bordering screaming plus reading the lyrics, not to mention i'd been playing non stop for about 2 hours before hand.
tell me what you think, and be honest.

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riley

dude dont beat yourself up so much... that was pretty ****in good...

IMO youre quite good at writing lyrics... i get ideas, but they usually dissolve into aimless rage and depression before i can write em down...

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thats why i carry a small notebook all the time...so if i get an idea i jot them down

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riley

Nothing wrong with the vocals Riley, but dammit please write something with pleasant lyrics have you anything with sunshine in it only messin Riley, got a bit messed up in the break in the middle, I'd like to hear you build on it though, maybe get yourself a multi-track recorder

haha thanks and the lyrics aren't what they seem, i used metaphors in practically every sentence, so it doesn't seem like what i first had in mind

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riley

Good job Riley! I admire you in posting your music - you are a braver man than me!

You sound a bit like Lou Reed with your singing style, and there's certainly nothing wrong with that! Your recording sounds like a bootlegged copy of something he'd do in one of his concerts.

Keep up your passion with your playing/singing/songwriting - you've got a good start and a good direction with what you want to do.

RickyD

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bad vocals? where? i think it fits good with your style of music. quit worrying so much what others think and just do your thing man.
for what it's worth, i like it. keep em comin'.

Good job dude. Your gettin better. Keep it up.

thanks but i'm still not completly satisfied with my vocals

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riley

I'm always afraid to put lyrics to any of my stuff, but maybe nows the time to.
Good job bro!

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I'm always afraid to put lyrics to any of my stuff, but maybe nows the time to.
Good job bro!

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Kid: "Hey Smokey! Where did you get your name?"
Smokey the Bear: "Well..."
(former user jimbo612)

I'm always afraid to put lyrics to any of my stuff, but maybe nows the time to.
Good job bro!

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Kid: "Hey Smokey! Where did you get your name?"
Smokey the Bear: "Well..."
(former user jimbo612)

You surprised me. You're getting better fast! I really liked the sound of it. I couldn't understand a word you said. Rock n roll!!!

Cool Riley, singing over the track so you can concentrate your singing effort could clean up the vocals will make it easier although the raw vibe might diminish. the choice is yours definitely keep doing what you're doing Bro.

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